Roses are red
Unless they are black or white with pink tips,
Or some other appealing hue.
If oranges are orange
How come violets are blue?
Ring around the rosy,
Pocket full of wake up,
The things you used to cherish
Youll find are often made up.
The moon used to be made of cheese,
Or a magical man in space.
Turns out its just a big piece of rock.
Those are craters, not a face.
Youll forget that instead of that wretched alarm clock,
A prince was supposed to wake you.
Its squealing and screeching,
Realitys reaching for you,
Stealing what you thought you knew.
That pretty rainbow in the parking lot,
That iridescence neath the car,
Is just some spilled oil
On some dried up bed of tar.
Ha! The truth will ruin you.
Youll grow up fast,
Youll hate the news,
Youll endure a few slaps in the face.
Churning beneath innocence
And wonder,
Your cynicism is fermenting.
Your friends will fight in wars,
Your kisses wont seal fate,
Ends might not meet,
Beginnings might go stale,
Ashes, ashes at your feet,
We all fall down.
And all the kings horses and all his men too,
Will watch and pick roses and call violets blue.
Laughing cause your moons a rock,
And your fairytales are dead.
What happened to wonder,
To miraculous things,
When did your childhood end?














Comments
the second to last stanza gets kind of chaotic for me though. do you think you really need these lines?:
Churning beneath innocence
And wonder,
Your cynicism is fermenting.
they're beautifully worded, but i would take them out. wonder seems repeated and they congest the flow i feel.
maybe you could shorten it to 'your cynicism slowly ferments' or something because i see why you did what you did, but like i said i'd change it.(just a suggestion)
but i love the concept, and i love how you did it. your teacher should really enjoy this, because i certainly did. =]
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